My Taniwha-Writing

For the past few weeks we have been practising  using descriptive lanquage in our writing. We have been trying to 'paint picture with words.' We all got to invent our own taniwha.We all drew our  taniwha and then we had to write about our taniwha. After that we had to read it to a buddy and they had to draw it.  :)  :P  
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Create and Describe Your Own Creature

(Nogard - Taniwha)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

• Have a name for your creature
• Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
• Describe the shapes
• Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
• What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
• Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
• What colours is it?
• Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
• Keep it simple and clear!
• Use correct punctuation and spelling.
• Check that your sentences make sense.

Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  

Have you ever heard of a Chubbywha?

Well I have.

A Chubbywha is a dino-fish. It has a oval shaped body and three oval heads and a long tail with two red axe shaped bits on the end of it.

It has tiger stripes on its tail and body. His teeth are as sharp as a spear. On two of his heads he has three spikes. My taniwha has a green fin on the top of his big fat neck.

He has four big eyes. The tiger stripes are black and he has a golden body.

He has four short legs.

When my taniwha eats beans he does a

BIG BOTTOM BURP! It sounds like this PPPTTTHHH! Sometimes my taniwha takes me to The International Space Station! At The International Space Station we say hi to astronauts. He also takes me to the Milky Way to get a milkshake. My milkshake tastes like a dark chocolate milkshake.

   

Nathan’s drawing

Sasha’s drawing of my taniwha.

Peer Evaluation   Name of Peer: Sasha

What I think you did well: on describing what you do with your taniwha.  

What I think you could improve on: Put the main shapes in before all the little bits of detail.

Self Evaluation

What I think I did well: I think I did my piece of writing well because I described it well.

What I could improve on:  I think I could do more writing.